Not a bad first video. I have fun making them too with gopro. I find that having 2 filming at the same time does wonders to the production factor. Go to youtube and type in my name, casey borgers. You can see some of my early clips with just one camera and then the later ones with 2. Also, I've learned to shorten the video to just the action. We have short attention span these days. The average viewing time of a youtube vid is much shorter than 10 minutes. One more thing, just add a good tune when the sound quality sucks. What editing software did you use?